18.1.14

"Every Word He Spoke was a Lie."

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(My entry for Go Teen Writers' recent contest.)
   Every word he spoke was a lie. He didn’t know what he was doing, though, so I’m not sure if it counts. All I know is that his whole life—everything he ever learned—was a lie. He literally grew up thinking green was purple and orange was blue. The grass was the sky, the children were the adults. Strange, right?
   When I found him wandering around on the street—a “river,” he called it—he was confused, asking where his enemies were. I took him in, hoping to teach him the truth.

   But now I’m wondering—what if I’m the one living in the lies?
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These thoughts have been whirling around inside my head ever since I was a little kid. I remember distinctly when I first came up with the idea. I was walking toward the shed at my old house, and I wondered, "What if green was actually purple?" I then tried to imagine a purple crayon with the word "green" on it. It looked absurd, so I shrugged it off. But, really, what if we humans labeled everything wrong?
 I got all positive feedback, except they said there's too much backstory going on, especially for the 
first paragraph. And I have to admit that I agree completely. I wasn't a finalist, but I was honestly just excited to do the thing. It was my first time. Congratulations to all the ones who made it as finalists!
Bekah Joan

10 comments:

  1. Beautiful.... You totally should have been a finalist instead of me...

    TW Wright
    ravensandwriting.blogspot.com

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    1. Thanks! :) I reallyreallyreally like the idea behind yours. It's so intriguing!

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  2. I found your entry really interesting. The last line is perfect! It makes me want to read more. I've also happened to wonder from time to time why a certain thing was named a certain way, and if we actually had the whole idea of living wrong for millions of years, all the wrong theories on the Universe and how it was created, and such. But now I'm wondering - how has he (the boy in the story) come to be this way? ;)
    Again, really great story! :) It's amazing how much weight you can put in 107 words...

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    1. Thanks! And I really don't know how it happened...I haven't figured out all the details yet. :p

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  3. This is just so amazing, you are so talented. I think my sister Mackenzie entered too

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  4. I love it! I think it's an amazing idea!

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